Dear 3M students 👋,
In this section, you will share your texts about "My experience at "El Tártaro". 😊
Remember to fulfill all the criteria given in your handout and I'll be reading your texts. I'll also share the link with your friends from 2M so they can get some insights about this important project that they will have soon.
Enjoy and leave your texts in the comments with your name. 👍👍
In this section, you will share your texts about "My experience at "El Tártaro". 😊
Remember to fulfill all the criteria given in your handout and I'll be reading your texts. I'll also share the link with your friends from 2M so they can get some insights about this important project that they will have soon.
Enjoy and leave your texts in the comments with your name. 👍👍
my experience at el tartaro was very cool.
ReplyDeleteI loved sharing with people because they were all very nice. we have atended a lot of people that need it but later a person arrived that we couldn't reach and that had made me very sad.
then we have lunch and that pleased me a little.
another day, we had worked until people stopped arriving and nobody knew why. that had been terrible but with a group of students we had gone to promote the project and so many people came.
Lucia Moreno Jequier
but despite all El Tartaro was one of the best experiences of my life because helping people makes me very happy and more if they need it.
It is a nice text, Lucía... Thanks for sharing your experience with us. If I were you, I'd pay attention to some spelling problems and the use of past, because at some point to lost it and then took it back. But good job, I'm glad you had a rewarding time there.
DeleteMiss Carla
we went to "el tártaro" on jaunuary 2020 with many volunteers of the school and with a team of dentists.When we arrived, we had unpacked the material, then we had had free time to enjoy with our friends and finally we had dinner. Every night we had gone to see the stars with a group of students and it was definitely one of my favourite parts. We had listened some music and at 1 am we went to sleep.
ReplyDeleteSince I was a child I had dreamed with "el tartaro" but I had never thought it would be such a nice experience and that I would meet so many beautiful people.
I'm so sankful with the opportunity provided by the school and if i could turn back time, I'm sure I would repeat this experience
Wonderful experience, I see here. Thanks for sharing and careful with the spelling of "thankful". Good job, but I don't know who wrote this text, please identify.
DeleteMiss Carla
I couldn't go to "El Tártaro" because the date of this activity " coincided with my family vacations that we had already planed. During the time of "El Tártaro" I was in Morrillos which is a beach near La Serena. I had been there many times before and I like it very much. This time I went for the first time with my cousin. We had gone together to other vacations but never to Morrillos. We did a lot of fun things. One day we went to swim in the waves and one big wave rolled us . We were really tired. That's because before swiming, we had gone biking at the ocean side for almost two hours. During this bike ride we saw a lot of birds that we hadn't seen before. I had never had a vacation so funny.
ReplyDeleteRoberto Valiente
Excellent text, Roberto. I would like you to pay a bit of attention to some spelling issues, but in general it was a good text with correct use of the Past Perfect. I'm glad you had fun at Morrillos with your family.
DeleteMiss Carla
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ReplyDeleteI couldn’t go to El Tartaro because I was occupied that week. During the week I did a lot of pending tasks and I finished a lot of projects that I had planned to do on vacations. The first day I had gone fishing, the third day I had climbed a mountain that I had never seen before, and the sixth day I had eaten in an incredible location near to Temuco. I hadn't had the opportunity to went to El Tártaro but I hope someday I will have it Unfortunately, I missed the experience but I’m glad that my colleagues enjoyed it.
ReplyDelete-L. Godoy
Great text, Lorenzo. Good to know that you used your time wisely and did some tasks before going fully on holidays.
DeleteJust pay attention to this little phrase: "I hadn't had the opportunity to went to El Tártaro," because after the "TO", the verb generally will go in Infinitive. Said that, it should have been "...the opportunity to GO to..."
Overall, good text and good experience.
Miss Carla
I couldn't go to El Tartaro because my family had planned for that week. We had talked with my cousins to meet up there. We had met up there a couple of times but this time was the best one because we had agreed to stay there a couple of weeks. At that moment I had seen some photos of El Tartaro and I was very excited to go and help some people, it was very sad to know that I was occupied that week because I hadn't noticed that I couldn't go until the last moment. I wish that I could've gone.
ReplyDelete-Rafael Castelli
Nicely done, Rafa, as usual I didn't notice many mistakes... Probably a word is missing in the first sentence after "My family had planned (...) for that week", but that's all.
DeleteGood job and as I told Gabriel a few comments below, I'm sure in the future there could be a possibility for you to live an experience like the one at "El Tártaro".
Miss Carla,
I couldn't go to “El Tártaro”, I wanted to go because it is a very good experience, but I had planned a trip with my mom and this was on the same date. I went to Peru, I had been there many times, because my family lives there. In Peru I went to my house on the beach, and I invited two friends, we had a great time, we had gone to the beach every day and we had eaten a lot of hamburgers. The days were very nice and we were able to going to surf, also we had rescued a cat that we had found on a hill and now it lives in my house. They were very good holidays.
ReplyDeleteJaviera Castillo
Aww, you did something good for that little cat, Javiera, so there's your rewarding experience for the summer.
DeleteGood text and I would just correct the sentence "we were able to going to surf", it should be like this "we were able to go surfing".
Nice job :)
Miss Carla,
In January, as students from 10th grade, we all went to a small town located on the fifth region of Valparaíso in Putaendo. There, all the interested went volunteering on a dental health proyect organizated by our school. My experience there was very nice, and I had waited all the past year to attend.
ReplyDeleteI only had had the experience from my sister so I already had made a thought of how the volunteering was going to be, but now I can tell my opinion. So the things I loved the most was having the chance to work with specialists in that area. I hadn’t been ever in that place before, so it was really exciting. With them I practiced in several aspects, but the one I can tell I enjoyed the most is operative. Although I hadn’t slept very well before attending, I knew exactly I had to be strong and that I had to be able, but after I had spent so many hours standing, the fatigue felt.
Alonso Lira
Nicely done, Alonso! I'm really impressed with the development of your English :).
DeleteI only noticed one little mistake " I hadn’t been ever in that place before", it should be "I had never been to that place before".
Good job
Miss Carla,
This summer, before going on holiday with my family, I had had the opportunity to go to “El Tartaro”. My experience there had been wonderful. “El Tartaro” is a voluntary job whose purpose is to offer dental services to families who needed. I remember I had found myself very nervous and excited when we were preparing for it. I hadn’t had any close friends and having new ones was a challenge for me. Every day the people had arrived from 9 am when we were ready to attend them. Until 6 pm we had worked, and I had a lot of fun because the families were very friendly. When it had finished, I wanted to stay a week longer. I highly
ReplyDeleterecommended it.
Ignacia B. - 3MA
Great to read that you enjoyed it even when it was a bit stressing and made you feel a nervous.
DeleteI would pay attention with the words "Assist / Attend", for example, you "Assisted the doctor", and you "Attended to medical lessons". They are different and can be easily confused. But that was all.
:)
Miss Carla
The tartaro is an volunteering that students from the segundo medio of college la girouette and dentists from univecity of san sebastian Works together to help people with no recorses of money to go to see how your mouth in the dentist and what help do you need, and the best of that it ´s that is totaly free !!
ReplyDeleteIn general there are about 30 people from school that goes to help and a loto f dentists go too, we get separate from like 5 groups of something like that. At the first 3 days we rotated at the 5 “labors” and the next 4 days in general we did the things that we liked the most. We knew a lot of people there and they were very kind and friendly. In personal I got a really Good moment at the activity, I worked a lot at the inscriptions and helping people to know at where is the clinic that they had to go and things like that. At the last they I could see how they remood a teeth and it were pretty amazing! I loved this experience and I recomended a lot to the next generation
These experencie its really healthy and Good for you like personnaly I thing I grow up a lot at the tartaro, and also I used a lot my habilities to talk to people to be friendly and sociable with people that I don´t know
Antonia, great to know that you felt that you grew a bit with this experience, that's one of the main ideas of this project. It is really good that you had the opportunity to move around the different stations and did different jobs there, interacting with patients and doctors as well as with your friend.
DeleteI'm a bit concerned that I didn't see any use of Past Perfect, I would re-read the text and see where you could add it, because otherwise, what you did was to write a text in Past Simple.
I notice some spelling problems but in words that you know, so probably they were typos and some grammar mistakes such as "people workS", remember that "people" as a word is plural, so the "s" is unnecessary. I would also pay attention to organisation and punctuation to make the text more fluent.
Overall, you did a good job but pay attention to these comments.
Miss Carla
i had never had an experience like this before.Well at first i wasn't very convinced to go,but we had ordered the pieces when i started to convince.I was excited with everything that was coming.For my bad luck the teachers put me in what i liked least since i had to interact a lot with people. We had eaten breakfast and they noticed us that there was had been delayed.The problem was that i had been excided about my work before the notice. The following days were very entertaining and it helped me a lot to learn. One day we had eaten dinner and then we went to the fair,when we got back we had played cards an then we went to sleep.
ReplyDeleteIgnacia silva
I'm glad you enjoyed your experience there, Ignacia. At "El Tártaro", there are many activities that you could love or hate, but all of them will help you grow as a person.
DeleteOn a separate note, I think you are overusing the Past Perfect, because the idea is to use it only when it is necessary and when you want to make clear that one action happened before the other, in all the other cases, you can continue using Past Simple as normal.
In general you did a great job!
Miss Carla
Unfortunately, I wanted to go to “The Tartaro” but I couldn’t because my family had planned holydays for all of us. Actually at first I thought I was going to, I had been so excited about the trip, but the date was removed because of the airline. But, instead of being in “The Tartaro” I was in “Cartagena de indias” in Colombia. Actually all was good, except for one thing. The only problem that we have came when we had agreed that we have not booked breakfast included, because my mother had read that having breakfast at hotel was really more expensive than in restaurants, this had made us feel bad because restaurants breakfasts wasn’t really good.
ReplyDeleteGabriel Valenzuela
Oh, I see. It is sad that you couldn't live the experience, but I'm glad you had a good time in family. I'm sure that in the future you could do some charity work and learn a bit about this experience in another context, so don't worry.
DeleteRegarding some aspects to pay attention to, I would mind the spelling of the word "holidays", it's super simple, but sometimes we misspell it. Additionally, I would be careful with the last sentence you wrote "this had made us feel bad because restaurants breakfasts wasn’t really good", because you used incorrectly the word "WAS" when it came to "breakfasts", it should have been "WEREN'T".
Overall, it was an excellent text, Gabriel, good job!
Miss Carla
In January we went to “El Tartaro”, a solidarity project that helps people who need dental care for free, here we spend a week learning and helping the doctors and the patients. In this experiences I seen a lot of thing but one of the thing that caught most my attention, was that old the people who came they were very happy and why were they so grateful?
ReplyDeleteI think it because they hadn’t got a lot of possibility for go to a dentist be it by the money or be it by how far they are from the main town. But when they arrived to the school it doesn’t matter how far they had come, they always have a smile on their face to see us, and they had waited months for us to arrive.
Also I think that all the thing we had done before we went to “El Tartaro” were so important and necessary, I also think that the speaking that the professor had told us was very clever and all of this together had prepared us for what this experience was.
In conclusion, I believe that the people of “El Tartaro” were so o grateful because we brought to their help that they can’t have easily and I think it was that how made people so happy to see us. I had learnt a lot of things but the people show me that doesn’t matter how many things you have, if not how empathetic and grateful you are.
Great text, very well organised and explained!.
DeleteI would be careful with this sentence: "In this experiences I seen a lot of thing but one of the thing that caught most my attention, was that old the people who came they were very happy". There are 3 mistakes here, one of them is "Experiences", it should be singular. Another thing is the "one of the thing", that "thing" should be plural. Finally, I think you tried to talk about "HOW old" people were and not "that old".
Good job, but please identify yourself. Thanks!
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ReplyDeleteI had gone to trainings in the school before went to “El Tártaro” with my school friends for learn about the health of our teeths and how we can teach hygenic tips. We had studied before went to “El Tártaro”, because we have to know a lot of things that they are new for us. In “El Tártaro” I saw a few things that I hadn’t seen before. I hadn’t seen how the teeths are extracted, also I hadn’t been when the dentist are cleaning the teeths, it could be so gross for a few people, but for me was satisfying. Go to “El Tártaro” was so beautiful and cool because I hadn’t stayed out of my house since the puppies were born.
ReplyDeleteFrancisca Feliu
Thanks for your text, Francisca, it is good that you learnt a lot of things that you were able to apply there but you can continue to use at home.
DeleteI would like that we pay attention to certain things, for example, there were moments when you forgot to place the subject in your sentence "I had gone to trainings in the school before (...) went to “El Tártaro”" o "but for me (...) was satisfying". Also, you have to remember that "teeth" is already plural, its singular form is "tooth", so the "s" is completely unnecessary.
Additionally, there were some Past Simple mistakes or probably you forgot to use it related to the context, such as in "because we HAD to know a lot of things that they WERE new for us". But in general, you did a good job!
Miss Carla
Before we had gone, we had partially studied the specializations of odontology, so later we could attend and help the people, and by the first day we had ordered all the attention rooms before we had the rest of the day off. The day everything started to work, the patients had arrived very early, and by lunchtime we had already been very tired. It was a lot of work, but it was worth it. I think my favorite day was the one that I had assisted a root canal treatment in the operating room. I had been lucky, because it was one of the few endodontic treatments that we had. I learned a lot and I feel grateful that I had the opportunity to participate in something like this.
ReplyDelete-Rosario Gaete
Great job, Rosario. I'm happy for you because you had an unusual experience which is to help the dental surgeon in an operation. Good job!
DeleteI would pay attention with the words "Assist / Attend", for example, you "Assisted the doctor", and you "Attended to medical lessons". They are different and can be easily confused. But that was all.
Miss Carla,
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ReplyDeleteI couldn't go to "el Tartaro", I had been training since January full time. Any ways I thik that it's a fantastic experience, because you have the oportunity to help people who needs it, and you learn to work being uncomfortable , sleeping in a bag, eating less than normaly, staying up late and waking up early. And still, keep working. I have to say, it's not the most entertaining job. I once went to Copiapo to help the families who had suffered a flood, and their houses where full of mud.We spent a week bringing food and removing mud from the houses. It was pretty exausting, but it was worth it.
ReplyDelete-Francisca Irazoqui
Francisca, I'm really happy that you mentioned another experience similar to the one at "El Tártaro", I'm sure you would've loved to be with your friends there but at least, you can understand their feelings about this beautiful trip helping people.
DeleteRegarding things to pay attention, always remember that "People" is plural, so "People who NEED help". There were minimal spelling problems, one I saw was "Opportunity", you wrote with a single "p" or "Exhausting" that you wrote it without the "h". But in general I don't have many issues with your text. Nice job!
Miss Carla
This summer in January I had gone to one school named “Paso Histórico” with my generation for help voluntarily to people who have oral problems. We had been there for six days, and we had worked with dentists and dental students. I loved this experience, because I had met a lot of people, like the people I had worked with, the people who fed us, and the patients. Also I loved do this because I had learnt a lot of odontology, and I had discovered new thins that I didn´t know that I like it.
ReplyDeleteColomba González
Dear Colomba, I'm super happy that you enjoyed your experience there and learnt new news. I think that is one of the most amazing things that happen at "El Tártaro", so good for you and all your classmates.
DeleteOn a separate note, I'd like to make some corrections in your text because there is an over use of Past Perfect at the beginning, the important thing isn't about using it a lot, it is to know when to use it. But in all the occasions, you used it in a grammatically correct form.
I'd like to correct a sentence particularly because it has some problems that matter: "This summer in January I had gone to one school named “Paso Histórico” with my generation for help voluntarily to people who have oral problems." In this sentence, I'd start by changing the "had gone" for "WENT"... Then after "Generation", I wouldn't use "for help", but "TO HELP"... and finally, after the "voluntarily" I would eliminate that "to". To sum up, the correct sentence should have been:
"This summer in January I WENT to one school named “Paso Histórico” with my generation TO help voluntarily (...) people who have oral problems."
Overall, good job!!
Miss Carla
I couldn´t go to "El Tártato" because I didn´t have enough money that the school requires. But while my friends went to El Tártaro, I had gone into a trip with my family to a little town near to Talca and Constitución for 2 weeks. I had spent new year there with my family and we enjoyed it a lot. Then when I had come back I used to hanged out with my friends and lot of things that I liked to do.
ReplyDeleteDear Lucas, it is a really sad news that you couldn't go, but it is understandable and I'm sure in the future there could be some other occasions where you can experience something similar to wheat your friends lived there.
DeleteIn terms of grammar, I have some comments because I feel that you couldn't follow very well when you use the Past Perfect and when to use the Past Simple. Additionally, your text has very few words, I think you could've explained yourself a lot more if you had used the 100 words I asked you to use.
Now, let's pay attention to specific sentences: "to a little town near to Talca ", here you have to remember that "Near" is never followed by "to"... So it should've been like this "to a little town near (...) Talca". Another thing is in this sentence: "I had come back I used to hanged out...", here after the "Used to", you should keep that Infinitive form of the verb like this "I had come back I used to HANG out"
Even though there are lots of words missing because you used less words than the ones required for the task, it was a good text.
Miss Carla
When I went to “El Tártaro” my experience were good , only the fact that helping someone is really satisfactory, you feel better with yourself and like after I had seized the time, helping others, I was so happy about it.
ReplyDeleteWe had started some sessions with experts in the matter, then we could do the attendance before
The experience was very tiring, so we had to rest a lot before the activities.
I had to change some previous compromises, but I made this before we went to this project.
We had prepared the hole thing for attend the patients, before they arrived, this was the part of the day that all of us were eager to start the new day.
Raimundo S. 3º
Nice experience, Raimundo, good job. It is good to know that you had a satisfactory experience there, I'm sure all of you did.
DeleteRegarding grammar comments, "... my experience were good", should be corrected as "... my experience WAS good". Another sentence would be "we could do the attendance", I think you meant "we WOULD CHECK the attendance". Then, "We had prepared the hole thing for attend the patients", we can correct it like this "We had prepared the WHOLE thing TO attend the patients".
But overall, well done!
Miss Carla,
Infortunately I couldn't go to "El Tartaro", this because I had broken both of my arms and I was in recovery, this week I used my time to read two books that I'd never read before, I enjoyed them a lot. Also I used my time to investigate things I didn't even know they existed. I'm sad because I hadn't go to "El tartaro" and I hope to have a similar posibility in the future but also I'm happy for my generation because they had this incredible experience and they will never forget it.
ReplyDeleteBenjamin Bruhn
Oooh, that's sad to hear, I'm sure that you didn't break both of your arms, right? I hope you were just kidding. But the good thing is that you used your time wisely.
DeleteRegarding corrections, in the sentence: "I'm sad because I hadn't go to "El tartaro"", you forgot to use Past Participle, so it should have been like this "I'm sad because I hadn't GONE to "El tartaro"". The rest is correct. Good job!
Miss Carla
Me and my grade went to "El Tártaro" to give dental assistance. "El tártaro" is a voluntary project organized by my school (Collège La Girouette)
ReplyDeleteLast summer I went to "El Tártaro", I hadn´t been there before and it was a really good experience. When we arrived, we had to clean every room and we installed the dental clinics. The food was delicious, I had heard before that the food was excellent. On the second day we started t working and I was an assistant in the surgery room, I hadn´t seen a surgery before, it was amazing, I learnt a lot. We had a different job for each day, but the days one and two were the best days of the whole experience. While we were in "El Tártaro" we have to clean the bathrooms and it was a traumatic experience. I hadn´t cleaned a bathroom that wasn´t mine before but fortunately my friend Ananda was an expert cleaning because she had cleaned her house alone for ages, so she helped me in every moment.
Camila Marchant
Excellent text, Camila, good use of language and I'm happy that you enjoyed your experience there. I wonder why only day 1 and 2 were good for you, I would've loved to read a bit about it. And it is true, it is quite traumatic to clean someone else's bathroom, so I can totally connect with your feelings.
DeleteThere was only one thing to pay attention to:
"While we were in "El Tártaro" we have to clean" --> "While we were in "El Tártaro" we HAD to clean".
The rest was perfect!
Take care,
Miss Carla